Mathias Wrote: It's not bad, after you have reconfigured and got more control of your breathing technique try again (I know your breathe was heavy, but I'm sure there's need for some more control.)
Thank you for restating what everyone else said.
Want my honest opinion? You've never tried to expand your stomach while singing. Your breathe was heavy beyond a bad microphone, can't take critic? Then stop, you're a failure if you can't improve with such simplistics.