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I made this story in about one hour during my Yoga class. I haven't written fiction since 8th grade, and mixed with my low effort it probably isn't that good. I hope you enjoy it though. (please don't mind the cheese)


It was a long drive to the lake. Her GPS said about one and a half hours. It was the nearest body of water, so I really didnt have a choice. I just wanted to get home as soon as humanly possible. I looked behind my chair at the rear passenger seat. Her blood was still there, creating a dark red splotch on the tan cloth. Vinegar and dish soap didnt work as well as I wanted to. It wasnt a huge issue. As long as there werent any cops along the road to pull me over, I was going to be absolutely fine. The trees were beautiful that night. My high beams lit up the base of the trunk, letting off a nice ambient yellow tinge at the top of the small, fragile branches. It reminded me of her. She was five foot one, short for her age. One would say that when I was done with her she was only four foot. Im not a savage for cutting her head off. She was fighting me. She BIT me. Shes the savage. I couldnt understand why she was resisting after what she did to me last year. She knew what she did was wrong. She wasnt only a savage, she was a whore.

45 minutes til I got to the lake. There was a dead raccoon in the middle of the road. It had been there for at least a week. The insides of the little guy were spilled out beside him. They had the resemblance of pinto beans. I was distracted by a bang in the trunk of the car. It couldnt have been her. I focused on the road. The almost neon white stripes were entrancing. If you went fast enough it looked like each line became one. Bang. Bang. It wasnt her.

I arrived at the lake. It was 11:47 PM. Bang. I pulled up onto the almost gravel-like sand. I looked out. It was a great view, almost BANG BANG prestine. I had a BANG brick by BANG me. The noise was getting BANG louder BANG. It wasnt hBANGer. It couBANGldnt have beeBANGn her. I get out of the car, leaving the BANG door open. The brick was in one hand, my 9mm in another. I placed the BANG brick on the gas BANG BANG pedBANGal. It WASNT her. It wasnBANGt her. God that noise was annoying. GOD THAT WAS ANBANBANGBANBGBANG NOYING. Her little car drove off into the lake. It was anti-climatic. The car began to sink into the water. The noise stopped. Bubbles emerged from the dark water. Then it was gone. I sat down on a nearby rock. bang bang bang baNG bang BAng BANG BANG BANG BANG BANG BANG BANG BANG BANG BANG I chuckled BANG BANG BANG BANG BANG BANG BANG BANG shes dead she died I knew that I killed her she died she isnt alive ABNG ABNG BANG BANG I killed her she died she cant WHY IS SHE MAKING THAT NOISE be alive I knew that she isnt making that noise BANG ABNG BANG BANG BANG I pulled the gun to my head shes dead I killSHE CAN'T BE MAKING THAT NOISEed her BANG BANG BANG closed my eyes

BANG

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sorry it isn't that great but at least i can get that sweet sweet award amirite

Well I like the story, to be honest.

If I only could give your award I like that special effects :D like drip or woosh :D

Great story

Bang Bang. Done reading, bang it was pretty good compared to the last one. Bang good job.

I like the SE *Bang Bang* haha