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by Sensei - 24-01-2016, 10:27 AM
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Posted: 24-01-2016, 10:27 AM (This post was last modified: 24-01-2016, 11:41 AM by Sensei.)
So basically someone with very nice grammar and vocabulary, i need you to re write a 1-2 paragraph statement i wrote. im acting like a youtuber i would be nice i you could add in more words



I have a YouTube channel with around 1 million Subscribers.
I am looking for companies to work with as i am going to 
be doing video reviews of PC hardware and peripherals.
If you could send me one of your products i would make a 
video review lasting around 6-10 minutes and would also

My fans have really been wanting this for a few months now! your company is making a name
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Posted: 24-01-2016, 10:55 AM
How about you post what you wrote and, after we re-write what you have, you choose the best sounding one.
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Posted: 24-01-2016, 11:36 AM (This post was last modified: 24-01-2016, 11:42 AM by Sensei.)
(24-01-2016, 10:55 AM)KOOPAOU812 Wrote: How about you post what you wrote and, after we re-write what you have, you choose the best sounding one.

Thanks, i don't know why i didnt think of that

Updated the post with my text!
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Posted: 24-01-2016, 12:51 PM (This post was last modified: 24-01-2016, 12:51 PM by Ballerushi.)
Here you go.

Hello, I have an YouTube channel that has approximately 1 million Subscribers. I am looking for companies to work with because I am going to be doing video reviews of both PC hardware and peripherals. I would appreciate it if you could sent me one of your products so I could make a video review lasting between 6-10 minutes. Moreover my YouTube friends and fans have really been waiting patiently and kindly for a few months now! This means I can not only promote your company and it's name but I will also be making my YouTube subscribers happy.

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Posted: 24-01-2016, 12:56 PM (This post was last modified: 24-01-2016, 01:19 PM by VisionryEye.)
I own and run a YouTube channel with approximately 1 million subscribers. I’m looking for companies who’d like to advertise and get their products in front of a large following. I’ll be doing video reviews geared primarily towards PC hardware and peripherals. If you’d like to send me one of your products, I could put it in front of a large audience with a video review, highlighting the positive attributes of your product.My fans have been anxiously awaiting product reviews that I can verify, review and stand by. And I believe there's no better to keep my fans happy, while pushing a product that works, yours.



Still your words for the most part I just made it more appealing for product owners, simple but to the point. I also may have added too many contractions but meh. (Also I'd like someone to critique it if possible for the shits, giggles and different perspectives .)
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