#bars x4

by Natsu - 11-12-2015, 12:34 AM
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Posted: 11-12-2015, 12:34 AM
I got a 9 strapped on my side, a badass bitch chillin’ inside, we gettin’ real high.
I’m not like a lotta these guys, leanin’ and dishin’ out lies, I’m spittin’ this fi(fire)
I’m tryna just seek out a change, so fuck all you lames, these niggas ain’t doin a thang.
I start with a thrower then bring out the flame. And if I see 12, I bolt like Usain.
Up on my block in the S, gauge to ya chest, just kno prophecy is the best.
Then I come out from the C, these niggas ain’t fuckin with me, the best in the east.
I’m coolin’ around wit my bros, rockin’ the finest of clothes, and fuckin’ these hoes.
I’m chasin’ my paper, so fuck all the haters, you talkin’ some shit then I’ll catch yo ass later.

Actually proud of this, was pretty damn dope, the flow is to be fucked with.
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Posted: 11-12-2015, 12:36 AM
Nice dude. Pretty fucking nice.
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Posted: 11-12-2015, 12:37 AM
(11-12-2015, 12:36 AM)Shadowed Grinner Wrote: Nice dude. Pretty fucking nice.

Ye, wrote this earlier and this shit was straight fire.
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Posted: 11-12-2015, 12:37 AM (This post was last modified: 11-12-2015, 12:38 AM by Ballerushi.)
I like it but it's pretty mainsteam. Try telling a story with some puns and good wordplay involved then you'll be one level closer to becoming a savage.
I don't understand the S and C bit though.
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Posted: 11-12-2015, 12:41 AM
(11-12-2015, 12:37 AM)Krept Wrote: I like it but it's pretty mainsteam. Try telling a story with some puns and good wordplay involved then you'll be one level closer to becoming a savage.
I don't understand the S and C bit though.

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"start with the thrower then bring out the flame" - referring to a flame thrower, rap is widely known for good verses to be known as 'fire'
"If I see 12 I bolt like Usain" - Usain Bolt

3 very good puns and excellent wordplay so idk what you mean.
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Posted: 11-12-2015, 12:42 AM
(11-12-2015, 12:41 AM)Natsu Wrote:
(11-12-2015, 12:37 AM)Krept Wrote: I like it but it's pretty mainsteam. Try telling a story with some puns and good wordplay involved then you'll be one level closer to becoming a savage.
I don't understand the S and C bit though.

SC - South Carolina
"start with the thrower then bring out the flame" - referring to a flame thrower, rap is widely known for good verses to be known as 'fire'
"If I see 12 I bolt like Usain" - Usain Bolt

3 very good puns and excellent wordplay so idk what you mean.

Oh okay.
I'm not saying you didn't include them, I'm saying you should try and mix it up with story-telling and see where it gets you.
 You think it's a game, till your life gets Tekken.

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Posted: 11-12-2015, 12:45 AM
(11-12-2015, 12:42 AM)Krept Wrote: Oh okay.
I'm not saying you didn't include them, I'm saying you should try and mix it up with story-telling and see where it gets you.

I actually have roughly 5-8 completed songs written. These are just free writing whenever I feel like it. And it is a story.
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Posted: 11-12-2015, 12:45 AM (This post was last modified: 11-12-2015, 12:46 AM by Ballerushi.)
(11-12-2015, 12:45 AM)Natsu Wrote:
(11-12-2015, 12:42 AM)Krept Wrote: Oh okay.
I'm not saying you didn't include them, I'm saying you should try and mix it up with story-telling and see where it gets you.

I actually have roughly 5-8 completed songs written. These are just free writing whenever I feel like it. And it is a story.

Nice ;) What's the story about?
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Posted: 11-12-2015, 12:47 AM
(11-12-2015, 12:45 AM)Krept Wrote: Nice ;) What's the story about?

It's about the daily actions and movements of where I'm from.
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Posted: 11-12-2015, 12:48 AM (This post was last modified: 11-12-2015, 12:48 AM by Ballerushi.)
(11-12-2015, 12:47 AM)Natsu Wrote:
(11-12-2015, 12:45 AM)Krept Wrote: Nice ;) What's the story about?

It's about the daily actions and movements of where I'm from.

Okay.
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