#bars x4

I got a 9 strapped on my side, a badass bitch chillin inside, we gettin real high.
Im not like a lotta these guys, leanin and dishin out lies, Im spittin this fi(fire)
Im tryna just seek out a change, so fuck all you lames, these niggas aint doin a thang.
I start with a thrower then bring out the flame. And if I see 12, I bolt like Usain.
Up on my block in the S, gauge to ya chest, just kno prophecy is the best.
Then I come out from the C, these niggas aint fuckin with me, the best in the east.
Im coolin around wit my bros, rockin the finest of clothes, and fuckin these hoes.
Im chasin my paper, so fuck all the haters, you talkin some shit then Ill catch yo ass later.

Actually proud of this, was pretty damn dope, the flow is to be fucked with.

Nice dude. Pretty fucking nice.

11-12-2015, 12:36 AM

ShadowedGrinner Wrote: Nice dude. Pretty fucking nice.

Ye, wrote this earlier and this shit was straight fire.

I like it but it's pretty mainsteam. Try telling a story with some puns and good wordplay involved then you'll be one level closer to becoming a savage.
I don't understand the S and C bit though.

11-12-2015, 12:37 AM

Krept Wrote: I like it but it's pretty mainsteam. Try telling a story with some puns and good wordplay involved then you'll be one level closer to becoming a savage.
I don't understand the S and C bit though.

SC - South Carolina
"start with the thrower then bring out the flame" - referring to a flame thrower, rap is widely known for good verses to be known as 'fire'
"If I see 12 I bolt like Usain" - Usain Bolt

3 very good puns and excellent wordplay so idk what you mean.

11-12-2015, 12:41 AM

Natsu Wrote:

11-12-2015, 12:37 AM

Krept Wrote: I like it but it's pretty mainsteam. Try telling a story with some puns and good wordplay involved then you'll be one level closer to becoming a savage.
I don't understand the S and C bit though.

SC - South Carolina
"start with the thrower then bring out the flame" - referring to a flame thrower, rap is widely known for good verses to be known as 'fire'
"If I see 12 I bolt like Usain" - Usain Bolt

3 very good puns and excellent wordplay so idk what you mean.

Oh okay.
I'm not saying you didn't include them, I'm saying you should try and mix it up with story-telling and see where it gets you.

11-12-2015, 12:42 AM

Krept Wrote: Oh okay.
I'm not saying you didn't include them, I'm saying you should try and mix it up with story-telling and see where it gets you.

I actually have roughly 5-8 completed songs written. These are just free writing whenever I feel like it. And it is a story.

11-12-2015, 12:45 AM

Natsu Wrote:

11-12-2015, 12:42 AM

Krept Wrote: Oh okay.
I'm not saying you didn't include them, I'm saying you should try and mix it up with story-telling and see where it gets you.

I actually have roughly 5-8 completed songs written. These are just free writing whenever I feel like it. And it is a story.

Nice What's the story about?

11-12-2015, 12:45 AM

Krept Wrote: Nice What's the story about?

It's about the daily actions and movements of where I'm from.

11-12-2015, 12:47 AM

Natsu Wrote:

11-12-2015, 12:45 AM

Krept Wrote: Nice What's the story about?

It's about the daily actions and movements of where I'm from.

Okay.